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Screenwriting Workshop

Query letter critique

March 24, 2010

A reader asked me to give him my opinion about his query letter and he agreed to let me share his letter and my thoughts as a blog post. Hopefully people can learn something from it. 1 January 2010 Production Company Name 123 First Street North Hollywood, CA 91007 Dear Director of Development; I have [...]

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Screenplay Synopsis Critique: The Question

January 6, 2010

Someone recently sent me this pitch for review: Title: The Question Logline: Random daily encounters lead a brilliant thirty-something to a different perception of his body. Synopsis: What would you do if tomorrow you discovered that there is nothing in your head? If you could no longer put a sandwich in your mouth nor drink [...]

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Query Letter Workshop: On Maggie

July 27, 2009

Adam sent this query letter and asked me to critique it. Dear include name here, My writing partner and I have recently completed a script, ON MAGGIE, which is a good fit for your particular production company, and the projects that include name of production company here are known for. ON MAGGIE is a bent, [...]

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Logline Workshop: Keelah Smith and the Army of the Night

July 14, 2009

Luciana recently emailed me this logline and I thought it was a good one to share. Title: Keelah Smith and the Army of the Night Logline: New York teen Keelah Smith just wants to mourn her recently-deceased dad, ace her SATs and get into Princeton, but discovers that an army in the world of night, [...]

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Logline Workshop: The Salt Bath

June 1, 2009

Kenneth sent in this logline: THE SALT BATH is a noir thriller in which prodigal son Dexter Grey returns to Salt Lake City and reunites with his high school sweetheart Julie Manning to solve his parents’ murders, plunging the duo into their families’ twisted histories of polygamy and violence. Think BLUE VELVET meets BIG LOVE. [...]

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Screenplay Synopsis Critique: Hollywood House

April 6, 2009

Reader Mike James sent in a synopsis and asked me what I thought of it.  I thought it was a good chance to actually put some of the ideas I’m trying to teach to work so below you will find Mike’s synopsis and my criticism of it.  Keep in mind as with any writing my [...]

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